I parcel out my heart
in stanzas sliced from its surface
like lamb on a döner kebap —
always led in circles, but
never getting anywhere —
so that these words are
given a chance
to bleed and beat
on tongues I’ll never know.
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Ramblings of a Drabbling Mind 
Oh my! This is fabulous… Love the write.
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Thank you. I was fortunate in that I eliminated the clumsy metaphors in a first attempt at the prompt.
If you don’t mind my asking, do you think the second to last line would work better reversed (“to beat and bleed”)? I’ve been hung up on that phrase for a while.
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To bleed and beat is better, I think.
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And yes, thank you for asking. Glad to help. Beautiful write whichever way you choose to go.
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Thank you for offering your opinion on the matter. I’ve enjoyed much of what I’ve read of yours and trust your judgment on that line.
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Wow. I really like the flow of this. Very powerful.
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Thank you. It’s got to have some sense of rhythm/beat if I’m going to explicitly claim as much, right?
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Nice flow, and interesting take on the prompt. ♥
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Thank you. The direction may have been a bit cliche, but I hoped to put a bit of a spin on it. …The pun, miraculously, was not intended.
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I can just picture meat on a spit with that opening stanza.
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I’m glad to hear the image formed well for you; I wasn’t sure if that reference would connect. (I had to research what it was even called.)
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So nice to pour your heart into your words.
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What fun is there in writing if we can’t leave a bit of ourselves on the page, right?
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I feel like I am following a spiral as I read.
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I hope the whirl didn’t leave you dizzy. Thank you for reading and spinning along.
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Beautiful, profound imagery.
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Thank you! I’m grateful to hear that you found depth in this beyond the shaved meat to which I likened my heart/writing. (It sounds like such a strange concept when I think of it that way…)
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Whew that ended viscerally! And I always enjoy your alliteration.
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Thank you for enjoying the alliteration; it seems to be my pen’s preset preference. As for the visceral ending, this piece felt a bit too tame without getting back to the vivid images of the heart.
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